There is a careful balance to strike in this sort of piece. It's exceptionally difficult to hit - it's a very small target from a very great distance. People are predisposed to pop-music. Something like this has to be accompanied by a rich narrative in order to be appreciated. It feels like a cultural song, displaying some sort of history...if that history is false, the song loses value. If that false history is attached to some sort of game or other pop-culture phenomena, it may gain value by being appreciators of that world.
There are tiny, minute details which...ruin this piece. I thought the song was over around 1:12.
It's gorgeous, compositionally. I cannot possibly fault either of you in anyway for what this piece is SUPPOSED to be. It's excellently assembled and performed, up to a point. I feel like the vocals are distant, almost prescient-in-the-past. I suppose that might be desirable, but...it also obfuscates what's being said. But also that mock-snare which presents itself first at the end of 02:25...should not be there at all...ever...I'm sorry if this offends you, but that is like...being in a doctor's office with 15 other people, and out of the blue soemone shout's "FUCK!"....and you're left sitting there, thinking...what just happened? And everytime it comes back, it's like a slap in the face...like walking through a crowd of people and there's a dude outside of your sight that's just yelling "FUCK" every once in a while...it's totally out of the mix of the rest of the song...where did that thing come from? I feel the song would be much better without it altogether...