The story was great and I love that it was drawn. I like the placing of the token, I had to go through twice to find it. When will you make part 3?
Reviews for "Dead Detention #2"
JackAstral responds:
Thanks! Probably next week! :)
Feels like the pace has really sped up with this one! I like how the mini-games now have time limits and aren't quite as easy to complete as the last round, but still not too challenging. Not so sure I like the frequent '15 minute later...' transitions though, or how the teacher's bitten so fast you haven't really had a chance to gain sympathy for her yet, mom on the phone and then, it's done. Plot's not bad but the pace feels jumpy somehow, whereas the last-edition jumps were usually for the fun/random. Anyway, looking forward to part 3!
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JackAstral responds:
Thanks! Very good points- I'll try avoid time jumps more in the next episode. I didn't really notice that I used them so much until now :b
Aw snap, my review from last episode got quoted in this episode :|. Don't sweat it too much though, the artwork fits both episodes perfectly fine, eye art included depending how you were portraying the teacher (I say you hit the nail on the head in that respect). I miss not seeing any eye color on any of the characters though, especially Naomi, her blue eye color was very good in ep. 1. You should do similar eye art for the others, it would look quite nice. Completely white eyes could fit certain emotions too though.
Artwork aside, I certainly like that you added a timer for the interactive bits and made them difficult (higher rating for that :) ), but this episode felt like it went too fast. Maybe you could have Max talk about anime more often or have conversations with the other characters? Maybe you could add some easter eggs too, like if you tried calling the wrong person in the cell phone scene. And of course the music was good too.
Keep up the good work with ep. 3! However, I'll recommend against quoting any NG reviews, it takes away from the game itself (unless perhaps you have one of your characters turn it into a good joke) and can embarrass whoever said that. (and to everyone else who might read this, I wasn't the only one that commented the way I did about the artwork. Criticism happens, but this time is more constructive I hope).
I could just imagine the spongebob "15 minutes later...."
Frustration idex meter: REALLY F%UCKING HARD!!!
the damn game where you need to run from the fire is
IMPOSSIBLE WITH A TOUCH PAD!!
love the story though. Kinda reminds me of High school of the undead.