HUZZZZAHH!!!
much, much, MUCH better. that was really good. but, of course i have to disapprove some a few things. sorry, but i guess im somewhat of a critick (sp). now, the battle stuff was kinda of retarded. better, yet retarded. i kno you have the potential to do better graphics. the fireball was pretty lame. and you kinda screwed around with the script....ALOT. your additions helped it a little, but it lacked the ability to show the characters personality. and finally, YAY!!!!!! you got a female voice! im so proud, lol. thats pretty sweet, but flonne and etna sound too much alike. i suggest getting anouther female, and 1 or 2 other males to help with the voices, because apparently its way to overwhelming for you to do them by yourself. like, ask some of your friends to help you out. other then that, this was a GREAT improvement. i hope my suggestions are giving you some ideas. cant wait to see the next chapter! (and good job to the girl that helped with the voices and other assistance)